3 stars I enjoyed the plot, which wasn’t very complicated, and the characters, who were unusual. I think there could have been more exploration of the psychological issues that made Lily and Connor who they were, but there was enough information to add dimension to their characters. Conversely, there wasn’t enough information to justify the revelation about another character that happens at the end. It wasn’t shocking, but there weren’t enough hints to make sense of it. Still, I’m sure I would have given this book 4 stars if not for one very distracting issue. The verb tenses kept changing, sometimes mid-sentence and it was extremely disconcerting. After a while, it became infuriating because it was just so frequent. Told from alternating first-person POV, here’s an example of a sentence from Lily’s chapter: “Before I knew what he meant, he pushes down the covers and lifts my shirt.” So we have simple past tense and present tense in one sentence! Sloppy editing like this conveys to me that the author doesn’t value her readers enough to take the extra step of cleaning up grammar. This doesn’t have to be costly, as there are many beta readers and ARC readers who are happy to point out these things. I’m hopeful that this author will endeavor to improve (or has already done so) in this area before publishing other books. July 20, 2020
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